What would be a good title for my poem?

Actually, the first half-decent effort I've read on YA. A bit cliched here and repetitive here and there- the opening and closing lines are awkward and very mundane- you need some kind of coup or twist at the end, maybe a play on the theme of colour.. What about "jaded clouds" instead of the obvious "dreary clouds". "Black shadows" is also very hackneyed. But some nice touches.